Unbecoming
A downloadable Visual Novel
Strong when you need to be. Weak when you want to be.
Take on the role of Violet, an android searching for her creator.
Unbecoming is a science fiction visual novel about the people who make you who you are for better and worse, cycles of abuse, and continuing on when you thought you'd be gone by now.
A queer novella with over 20 thousand words of trauma, death, and love.
Be warned: this work contains explicit sexual scenes, discussion of suicide, described gore, and fetishistic material e.g. exhibitionism, hypnosis, and petplay.
A robot is a type of doll is a type of maid is a type of dog, if you think about it.
Made for the Menhera VN Jam
Writing by Hate Grenade
Character and menu art by Breezy
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This is certainly an ambitious VN! It's remarkable that you were able to put together a detailed story of this length in such a short span of time.
I was impressed by the CGs, especially the sequences with animated visual effects; they really helped those intense moments to stand out strikingly! I also thought that the sound design was well done—particularly the use of sound effects, though the background music also gave the VN quite a bit of character, heheh.
Meanwhile, at the risk of understatement, the story was staggeringly dark, and made for a very sobering read. Watching Violet's unbecoming progress as it did, ceaselessly, ruthlessly, bit by bit and step by step until nothing was left of her was... difficult, to say the least. In all honesty, I found myself feeling rather uncomfortable at certain points, which is a rarity for me.
And that goes doubly so in light of the story's conclusion: Seeing Arachne, for all of the literal crimes and other abhorrent things she did, not only completely evade any consequences for her actions but actively prosper in the pursuit of her schemes... well, it's a conclusion that's unfortunately more true to reality than I might care to admit, I'll say that much, heh.
You've made quite the memorable VN here~
Hey, thanks for reading! I deeply appreciate hearing how you felt throughout this process.
Yeah Breezy did such a good job with the CG's I was blown away. Wanted to make those scenes feel very special.
Ah. Yeah. When I first started writing, I was worried it wasn't going fit well with the jam theme, but as it developed, uh. I wasn't as worried about that.
Maybe one day I'll work on a followup that addresses Arachne's endgame more thoroughly, but that would have to be a whole thing unto itself, really.
Thank you so so so much for the detail and attention! It means a lot that you'd take a look at something I worked hard on. Very much appreciate it, thanks.
"You had to cross that divide first, from mere machine to person. And only now that you have, are you worth breaking back down into an object."
Oh, I am so normal. I am very extremely normal about this line and these two's relationship, 100%
Extremely well-written and horny brainworm-inducing VN that I had such a blast reading through. I feel for Violet but a part of me also envies her, you know? And Arachne is such a bitch and can I have her number please.
I loved this so much, both the horniness and the emotions were on point and you made me care about these characters with less than 20k words, and so easily too :D
hey I'm super flattered you liked it!!
yeah a lot of lines were. Fun to write lmao. maybe wait until Arachne gets her shit together before hitting her up lest you get Ahead of yourself if you know what I mean.
i'm super glad you feel this way though! thanks!!!